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Caravan Palace

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The stage is lit
by lasers and light tubes,
the air a blend
of sour diesel weed,
cotton candy vape,
cigars, popcorn and poutine.

A man in a seersucker
suit and straw hat
two-steps with a woman
twirling a glow-in-the-dark
hula hoop.

I press two fingers
to my clavicle,
feeling the heartbeat
of the bass saxophone.
It feels good to write these little imagist vignettes again.  Also, check out Caravan Palace.  They are amazing.

Questions:

1.  Did you get a feel for the place/experience?
2.  Anything confusing/clunky/unclear/out of place?
3.  Other comments/concerns/critique?
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pearwood's avatar
When artist and instrument are one.

It flows beautifully, at least to my ears.