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A teal-dyed peacock fetish
taped over mesh bruises.
Interior city as beaded fetish.
A buffet with no fruit. Bruise
theme colors: yellow, purple, green. Glitter
and glamour behind bullet-proof windows.
Chippendale skin and eyes clouded with glitter.
Please, don't look out the windows.
Reverently bowed heads over useless
coins. Hands clapped over ringing ears—
all the bells and whistles. Useless
prayers. Moist lips. Unseen sand
ravaging gilt doors, filling ears
and pools. Invisible desert sand.
taped over mesh bruises.
Interior city as beaded fetish.
A buffet with no fruit. Bruise
theme colors: yellow, purple, green. Glitter
and glamour behind bullet-proof windows.
Chippendale skin and eyes clouded with glitter.
Please, don't look out the windows.
Reverently bowed heads over useless
coins. Hands clapped over ringing ears—
all the bells and whistles. Useless
prayers. Moist lips. Unseen sand
ravaging gilt doors, filling ears
and pools. Invisible desert sand.
A rather experimental sonnet...(and it needs the ampersand for the title, dammit!)
Questions:
1. Like I said, experimental. Does it work for you? Why/why not?
2. I used repeated words instead of rhyme. Is it too distracting?
3. How is the imagery?
Questions:
1. Like I said, experimental. Does it work for you? Why/why not?
2. I used repeated words instead of rhyme. Is it too distracting?
3. How is the imagery?
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I like the cadence, or at least how it runs in my head 