For #
theWrittenRevolution's Anniversary Contest (
[link]): "Intense emotion mixed with something neutral (e.g. sensory perception/math equations)", and a bit of "A specific part of the day, over a span of time, to tell a story".
Questions:
1. Does the form work for you? If not, how would you change it?
2. Does it fit the premises for the contest?
3. Suggestions?
(for #
theWrittenRevolution:
[link])
edit 5/23/12: Because I am very dim, I forgot to mention that the contest is now closed (as of April 4th, actually...

). I won second place for prose!
...and a DLD. And a DD. Holy crap.
edit 12/3/12: The ever amazing *
disrhythmic has done a reading (here:
[link]) for #
Elocutionists. Amazing reading, amazing group. You should check them both out!
I could talk about the like, juxtaposition of like, the tea and the realness, but you already know that.
The simplicity is what drives this, you know? Like, the quietness (not silence) of it all. It's subtle. Like the light floral undertone in a good Ti Kuan Yin.
"Quietness" is very much what I was going for with this piece. I'm very glad you got it!
(and thank you for the fav!)
Thanks!