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Clementine

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My fingernails mangle
the mottled wax
shell.  Citrine sap
caresses each bulge
as I lick away
mattress-foam veins.
My teeth pop  polyps
and shred cellophane skin.

If only everything
could be this sweet.
Good oranges are hard to come by this time of year....

A couple questions...

1. Do the lines flow?
2. Do the descriptions make sense?
3. Does the last line work?

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